【案例点评+福利放送】今年提前批最奇迹的结果

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[i=s] 本帖最后由 Lenny雷 于 2015-12-15 01:15 PM 编辑 [/i]

[free]首先要祝贺@DonQuixote 同学,纯DIY在REA成功录取Georgetown University Walsh School of Foreign Service,全世界最伟大的国际关系学院,成为今年纯大陆背景EA SFS的极少数幸运儿(录取结果还在更新中)。

作为IR/Government同行,Lenny认为她的录取结果是奇迹般的。看到报喜的信息时,Lenny感动得双眼湿润了(学妹跟麻麻喜极而泣的画面勾起了一年半前off 5 top LACs waitlist的催泪记忆)。Georgetown的高冷众所周知,但很多人可能没有一个特别清晰的概念。作为一所被排名坑死的超级精英大学(由于一直不使用CA系统0.0),GU在美国人心目中丝毫不输Ivies,录取难度也与杜克、宾大平起平坐。新英格兰的贵族私立学校中,很多最终前往哥大、达特茅斯等同级神校的学生都没有被Georgetown录取。2015年以前,GU每年录取的大陆国籍学生从不超过15人,而且国际背景(美高/UWC等)占了一半以上。2015年通过扩招录取了20+,多了不少大陆高中的同学,但了解内幕的人都晓得,这其中的女神级人物最终选择Harvard、Wharton这样的终极神校。从每年的academic credentials来看,GU admits的SAT CR平均分750,多门SAT2(学校强制要求提交三门),5+ AP满分,而录取SFS的人,国际Model UN/Mock Trial/Mock Congress/Debate的大奖和staffing experiences已不算亮眼的背景,每人基本上都有国际峰会/青年论坛的积极参与经历;亚非拉地区长时间的义工体验或immersion research;大型国际组织实习附带政坛大神推荐信等不可复制的王牌。而在这种现状下,学妹靠着并不显眼的标化(ACT 31),纯大陆普高背景(北方某高考大校)和没有过多优势的EC(虽然在同龄人中已格外出色但相对于SFS依然略逊色),硬生生地敲开了SFS的大门,将众多被REA defer的同辈大神抛在脑后。

学妹的chance帖详见https://www.cuus.info/thread-137896-1-1.html
面试经验详见https://www.cuus.info/thread-138850-2-1.html

学妹对于自己EC的描述比较谦虚,但也比较符合真实水平。整体形象是:基础扎实的政治学术党、国内美式辩论表现最出色的学生(社团发起人、地区比赛领导者的身份)、校内明星学生(学生会公关部长、校报主编、学校选修课设计者&讲师)。

由于GU使用的是独 立申请系统,三篇大容量的补充文书在申请中成为重中之重。学妹的文书 ---

[backcolor=Yellow]文书一[/backcolor]
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In the space available discuss the significance to you of the school or summer activity in which you have been most involved.

The hotel room was slightly crowded when we eight people gathered in it. I was the one who clicked on the website to check the results, and couldn't believe what I saw. All of our team, eight people , four pairs in total, advanced in elimination round of Shanghai Invitationals, the second largest National Tournament in China. And it was only the first time our school officially sent a debate team to compete.

A year ago, Public Forum Debate was barely heard of not only in my school but also in the whole northeastern China. Today, XXX High School has an American Debate Association with over 300 members, and last year, we successfully held the first regional tournament in northeastern
China. And that moment was a watershed, which announced us as a non neglectful force in Chinese American debate society.

It all started from an online lecture about debate. The eloquence and critical thinking of the debaters immediately attracted my attention. The essence of debating interested me too --- there is no definite answer, you only need to prove yourself right. As a girl with diverse interests, I find no game like debating so aroused my passion that I was eager to share it with more people. For a week, I lost myself in the excitement of creating a brand new "empire" in my school.

However, I was not fully aware that the process was going to be so difficult.

The initiation was tough yet endurable. For a week, I lingered outside the principal's office, waiting patiently for an "appropriate" chance to talk to him about the establishment of American Debate Association. Joined by several like minders in school, we drew up the first documents for frameworks of the association. Traveling between two campuses, I publicized the activity and recruited new members. I skipped lunch to disseminate recruitment
brochures. I negotiated with school for available classrooms. I prepared for trainings, lectures, and scored entrance exams. I never realized the endless lobbying, the scorching sunlight, and the sleepless nights could be so torturing yet satisfying.

But as how plot normally proceeds, frustration followed like shadows. The new debate club was constantly understaffed; my associates lost the material we had been preparing for a whole week; our sponsors suddenly cut the budget and diverted the money to others; the trainees did not show up as expected to training sessions. My self confidence was repeatedly shaken. I began to feel utterly exhausted from anxiety and despair.

And before that moment came the hardest time. Pressure quadrupled while I was preparing for school-held regionals, selecting team for Invitationals, training the chosen members, and studying for the Provincial General Exam, which decided whether I could graduate.

But the darkest time is always before dawn. At last I made it all through, and all the hardship before and prosperity later incorporate into that very moment. I learnt to lead, to conquer, to be determined, and to be tough, holding on to every value I believe in, not losing faith for belittling and disdaining.

So I hope I could remember it forever, reminding myself of the sweet fruit resulted from hard work, even though things seem too hard to proceed sometimes.

And here I am: a debater, a fighter, a dreamer, and a believer.

If I could go back to that moment, I would say to myself, "Remember this feeling. And remember never to give up, as you have just accomplished."

文章很有力地传达出这位同学对美式辩论的高度热情;社团成立跌宕起伏的过程描写也特别生动。

[free][backcolor=Yellow]文书二[/backcolor]
As Georgetown is a diverse community, the Admissions Committee would like to know more about you in your own words. Please submit a brief essay, either personal or creative, which you feel best describes you.

由于涉及政治议题,带有敏感信息,原文不会分享。大意是:学妹受到了哈佛夏校“比较政治”课堂的启发,在校内成立选修课讨论中国与西方民 主。整个过程也比较曲折;文章全面表达了学妹对国内中学生政治意识、政治参与度的担忧,并联系了自己未来在美国学习政治的目标。

[backcolor=Yellow]文书三[/backcolor]:[/free]

APPLICANTS TO THE WALSH SCHOOL OF FOREIGN SERVICE: Briefly discuss a current global issue, indicating why you consider it important and what you suggest should be done to deal with it.

On October 20, 2013, my hometown suffered a severe smog. That morning, I got lost on the way to school, and my case was by no means an exception. The whole city was paralyzed. Five days later, the smog finally dispersed. But throughout the following winter, the city experienced a daily maximum PM2.5 exceeding 500, which is 14 times of Chinese standard (Environmental Air Quality Standard, qtd. in CK365.cn) and 20 times of the WHO standard (WHO, 9). School was cancelled for 6 times that winter, and people with chronicle respiratory diseases were too afraid to step outside. The streets were empty and hospitals were crowed. (Zilong Cheng, Xinhua Net)

That was the first time I truly realized how scary air pollution could be. Before then, the Photochemical smog in Los Angeles and the Great Smog in London all flashed distantly as only notorious tales. Over the past decade, air pollution has become an insidious problem all over the world, especially in the developing regions. According to a visualization tracking conducted by NASA, Asia, Africa, and part of South America has been fiercely emitting black carbon, a component of PM 2.5 (Horace Mitchell, NASA). China, the leading victim in air pollution, is now followed by companions as India, Pakistan, and Mexico. The growing urbanization, prosperous industries, and relatively backward fuels and devices in developing countries all contribute to their becoming the worse hit area of air pollution. With the pressure of economy development, few countries are willing to make sacrifices for the clean air.

Air pollution has already become a major risk to public health. It contributes greatly to strokes, heart disease, lung cancer, and many chronicle and acute respiratory disease, and caused 3.7 million premature death in 2012 (WHO). The thick smog caused by severe pollution also extremely disturbed normal life. Combined together, the negative effects of air pollution pose great threat to the each countries' as well as the entire world's development.

Developing countries often refuse to exchange economic growth for the seemingly useless pollution control. Nevertheless, the price they are finally going to pay far exceeds the originally saved benefit. The environmentally-friendly cost of a ton of coal, a heavy loaded truck, and an upgraded oil refinement is 26 dollars, 3000 dollars, and 8 billion dollars respectively. Implementing those devices approximately costs 16 billion dollars annually, but
China now has to spend 167 billion dollars for the damage control (Jing Chai). (All figures are measured in US dollar).

I am not suggesting that countries should cease all environmental damaging industries. Measures such as simply shutting down heavy industry factories will never solve the problem, and will causing numerous job losses.

What we need is a transformation and a shift of investment from the first and second industry to the third. Some countries obsess with the industry that once brought them glory but is being naturally ruled out. Take the steel industry in Asia for example (Moody's). Asian governments persistently instills funding into steel industry at the rate of over 2 billion dollars per year, while the production of steel already exceeds the market's need (Jing Chai).This approach is wrong. Investment should be directed to new technology industries, or even the environmental industry itself. Meanwhile, governments can help the structural unemployment by preparing the workers for new industries. This process might even create new job opportunities, as the government is playing actively in the industrial shift. Finally, when the transformation is completed, government policies should favor those industries that switch to environmentally friendly production and offer them subsidies, thus encouraging them to abandon the traditional pollution-causing manufacturing styles.

Furthermore, the air pollution control need concerted effort from both government and citizens. Government should adopt environmental regulations with specific executive bureaus. And the enforcement of legal regulations plays another important role. Propagandas for environmentally-friendly lifestyles should be promoted in cities, and those for fuel uses, burning devices, and less polluting agricultural practices should be done in rural areas. The public, at the same time, carries the responsibility of censorship, supervising and turning in the companies or industries that are not following the pollution control regulations.

The first step of solving a problem is to recognize there is one. Air pollution can not afford to be neglected. People should not wait until their city becomes enveloped in an unnavigable fog until they realize we must come together to battle this unanimous, not accidental, air pollution.

Works Cited:
www.ck365.cn, "Originally Chinese title. Trans.[The New PM2.5 Standard might be used starting in 2016]". 30 Mar, 2012. Web. 25 Oct 2015.

World Health Organization, "Air Quality Guidelines for Particulate Matter, Ozone, Nitrogen Dioxide, and Sulfur Dioxide, Global Update in 2005": 910.
June, 2006. Web.

Cheng, Zilong, "Originally Chinese title. Trans. [The PM 2.5 in Harbin today exceeded 500, causing multiple traffic accidents]", Xinhua Net, Xinhua News Agency,20 Oct. 2013. Web. 25 Oct 2015.

Mitchell, Horace. "Atmospheric Black Carbon Density." svs.gsfc.nasa.gov. National Aeronautics and Space Administration. 13 Dec. 2009. Web. 25 Oct 2015.

World Health Organization, "Ambient (outdoor) air quality and health", who.int, WHO 2015, March 2014. Web. 25 Oct 2015.

Under the Dome.. Producer Jing Chai, Personal sponsored documentary. 2015. Web. 23 Oct 2015.

Park, Chris, and Jimmy Zou, "Moody's: Asian steel industry outlook negative on declining profits and growing supply glut". www.moods.com. Moody's Investor Service, 13 Jul 2015. Web. 27 Oct 2015.

这篇时事评论不论从问题剖析深度、逻辑还是例证都体现了较高的学术水平,同时充分表达了对环境污染问题的关注(公民意识)。policy advice也比较有看点。不过很少有学校提交如此严谨的学术讨论,因此文章仅供各位参考。

[free]纵观@DonQuixote 同学的学术、课外表现和申请的制作,她将自己的学术功底、课外阅历、从理论融汇到现实中的政治理想和情怀,以及高效的申请packaging skills & insights、出色的临场面试发挥展现的淋漓尽致。鲜明的个性给招生官留下了深刻的印象。当然哈佛夏校教授推荐信的外在因素也起到了一定作用。在这里再次祝贺学妹成功敲开大神校之门!也预祝各位ED I圆梦、ED II & RD继续加油![/free]
 
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[i=s] 本帖最后由 WesAdmission 于 2015-12-15 01:38 PM 编辑 [/i]

Lenny好帖!

顺着继续12月的宣传

【十二月重磅】卫斯理安大学东亚招生官在线说明会

Wesleyan University东亚区招生官Kora Shin将于[backcolor=Yellow]大陆时间12月21日晚八点至十点[/backcolor]举办大型在线说明会,解答关于1月1日截止的常规录取(RD)和弗里曼亚洲奖学金(Freeman Asian Scholarship)的申请问题。有兴趣者请添加录取办公室微信账号[backcolor=PaleTurquoise]WesAdmissionsChina(二维码如签名)[/backcolor]。主页君将邀请您进入微信讨论群。由于群内人数超出自由添加上限,请各位自行将微信号进行实名验证(绑定任意银行卡/信用卡即可)。对弗里曼奖学金感兴趣者可先自行阅读官网信息(http://www.wesleyan.edu/admission/international_students/freeman.html

凭借旗舰式的电影学院,卫斯理安(Wes)与哥大、纽约大学以及多所常春藤盟校共同跻身[backcolor=RoyalBlue]美国总统奥巴马长女Malia的大学申请名单[/backcolor]。而Wes本身作为一所提供研究生课程的大型文理学院(LAC),同时拥有着充分跨学科的学术体系、优越的地理位置、多产且高产的校友网、浓郁的人文艺术气息、包容进步的校园文化还有极富影响力的多元学生群体,是LAC中不可多得的资源型学校。卫斯理安在中国大陆招生规模大,学生背景多样,各式各样的个人发展需求都能在这里得到满足------

I. 商科/金融方向:
拥有百年商业精英传统的卫斯理安是现代花旗银行之父Walter Wriston、创办著名大学评论网站UNIGO.COM的青年才俊Jordan Goldman、数名麦肯锡咨询公司前总裁等经管领域杰出人士的母校。学校拥有文理学院中顶尖的经济系,课程设置偏向数理应用和金融实践;定量研究中心(Quantitative Analysis Center, QAC)提供大量的数据分析课程和校内实习机会,让学生接受数理技能的训练。Wes在福布斯杂志的“2015全美最佳创业大学(小型学院)”榜上名列第九,这与校内蓬勃的创业文化密切相关。主要学生社团包括两大创业培训组织、咨询社和投资俱乐部,每周都有各自策划的商业技能培训、嘉宾座谈系列、企业见习、实地走访和校友互动等活动。学校提供多项创业和实习基金,其中包括“麦肯锡奖学金”(Gilbert Clee Scholarship),内含高含金量的暑期工作机会。卫斯理安是高盛、麦肯锡、摩根大通、德意志银行等顶尖金融、咨询机构的常规招聘校。中国毕业生多人成功进入花旗银行、麦肯锡、东京银行等企业工作。

II. 理工科方向:
一所注重本科教学的文理学院可提供硕士和博士研究生课程,这在美国高等教育界极其罕见。然而这样的环境走出了[backcolor=Yellow]2015年诺贝尔生理学医学奖得主大村智[/backcolor](Satoshi Omura)和多位国家级院士。卫斯理安是接受美国国家科学基金会(NSF)科研拨款最多的文理学院,主要经费投入于生命科学和化学领域,因此Wes生物和化学专业的科研教学实力造就了LAC中最好的医学预科项目之一(Pre-Med),医学院升学率接近100%。与此同时,天文学、神经科学、地质学和环境科学等科系也拥有相当可观的博士产出率。不论是校内的实验项目和校外的研究机会(教授带领、遍布国内外)都吸引着大批学生参与。Wes的数学、计算机和物理课程精小,却有很高的学科互通性和弹性。学术表现优秀的学生[backcolor=LemonChiffon]最早可在大三选择研究生级别的课程[/backcolor]。去年学校最新推出了[backcolor=Navy]“综合科学院”(College of Integrative Sciences, CIS)[/backcolor],伴有大量学科交叉的主题研究和实践课程,类似西北大学的ISP专业。卫斯理安与加州理工学院、哥伦比亚大学和达特茅斯学院长期保持3+2工程双学位的项目合作。目前已有中国学生通过该项目前往合作院校进行工程的学习。

III. 社会科学方向:
卫斯理安的社会科学以跨领域、高强度、深层次的教学特点出众,是大学学术特色最典型的体现。学校的经济、政府学、心理学、历史、人类学等科系拥有一大批成就斐然的教授和学者,包括曾获诺贝尔和平奖的联合国气候变化项目首席经济学家Gary Yohe、社会心理学家Scott Plous、美国驻香港前总领事Steven Young(校友)等,课程容量大、涵盖范围广。卫斯理安是美国大学中跨学科教育的先驱典范。其独创的社会研究院(College of Social Studies, CSS)是学校三大跨领域学院之一,形似牛津大学PPE项目,采用导师制小班教学(Tutorials),主要教授西方政治、经济、社会、文化经典理论和历史。CSS是文理学院中最好的法学预科项目(Pre-Law)之一,以极高的法学院升学率与阿默斯特学院、鲍登学院的相关专业平起平坐,深受中国学生欢迎。近年的中国毕业生被哥大、宾大、芝加哥、纽约大学等前十法学院录取,升学成功率领先于绝大多数LAC的中国大陆学生。

IV. 人文艺术方向:
卫斯理安人文艺术教育的精华体现在语言文化研究和表演艺术创作两方面。两大跨领域学院 - 人文文学院(College of Letters,COL)和东亚研究院(College of East Asian Studies,CEAS)将语言教学和社会文化研究结合在一起,构建了欧陆人文和东亚人文的完整教学体系。Wes与姐妹校瓦萨学院(Vassar)在法国巴黎、意大利博洛尼亚和西班牙马德里共同开设了外语文化学习中心,每年接受大量出国学习的本校和外校学生。而最值得一提的还是Wes的艺术风潮。学校的电影学院(全美前十)、戏剧系和音乐系(民族音乐学全球顶尖)在过去30年间为美国文艺界输送了无数知名校友,其中包括多部风靡全球的电影、剧集的导演、主创编剧和演员:Michael Bay(变形金刚), Joss Whedon(复仇者联盟), Carter Bays & Craig Thomas(老爸老妈浪漫史),Akiva Goldsman(美丽心灵,达芬奇密码,奥斯卡奖得主)等等。三大院系含有大量影视制作、舞台技术、发展史研究鉴赏、创作、导演等不同类别的课程。音乐系的西非舞蹈、中国民乐团、管弦乐团、南印度音乐等表演课程向所有零基础学生开放并有可算进GPA的学分。
 
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[backcolor=Indigo]关于申请程序:[/backcolor]
1. 分控?NO!
对于在中国大陆和美国、加拿大高中就读的申请者,卫斯理安[backcolor=Yellow]不要求其提交含SAT和ACT在内的标准化考试成绩[/backcolor]。上交SAT和不上交的申请者会被分开审核。
2. 补充材料
Wes鼓励申请人提交艺术类和科技类的补充材料。有理科奖项和研究成果的同学可以将相关证书和文件摘要整理成PDF文档,作为Science Portfolio通过Slideroom上传。Wes还建议参加过InitialView面试的同学发送视频至录取办公室,以弥补为争取到的面试机会。
3. 录取难度
近年的申请宗人数保持在一万上下,总录取率约为21%,SAT的录取平均分在2050-2330之间。2015年中国大陆籍申请者(含美高、新加坡等国际地区高中)688人,录取45人,入学28人。预计本年度大陆申请人数将会持续上涨,录取人数相应增加。

[backcolor=Indigo]关于费用节省选择:[/backcolor]
Wes每年的学杂费超过六万三千美元,在私立大学中属中上水平,且中国学生没有任何得到财政补助(need-based financial aid)的机会。下面介绍几个学校提供的费用节省选项:
1. 弗里曼亚洲奖学金(Freeman Asian Scholarship)
该项目由AIG集团联合创始人Mansfield Freeman创立的弗里曼基金会运行,每年向东亚11个国家和地区的一名录取学生提供全额奖学金的补助。查看申请细节请点击文章开头的网址。基本程序:申请Freeman的学生中会产生6-10名左右的候选人受邀至北京或上海进行校友面试。RD结果出来后会有大于或等于一轮的Freeman挑选,直到被选人确认入学。往年的候选人同时被哈佛、斯坦福、阿默斯特等最顶尖大学录取。
[backcolor=Yellow]2. 三年毕业项目(Three-Year Option)[/backcolor]
每年都有中国学生选择在提前一年毕业。Wes毕业要求学生修满32个学分和一个专业,平分至8个学期,每学期上4门满学分的课。选择三年毕业的学生只需在五个学期上五门课(或以上),外加一个冬校和暑校就能完成该计划。多位三年毕业的中国学生成绩优异,并获得双学位,在职场和顶尖研究生院中如鱼得水。
3. 校内打工
校园里有很多向国际生开放的打工机会。选择担任宿舍管理员(Residential Advisor)或住房经理(House Manager),[backcolor=Red]住宿费用即可免除[/backcolor]。学校的咖啡厅、超市、饭堂、图书馆、艺术工作室、校友办公室等单位都会提供打工的机会。每周平均工作6小时。

[backcolor=Indigo] 关于生活起居&出行:[/backcolor]
学校位于康涅狄格州中部的小型城市米德尔顿(Middletown),距州府、美国“保险之都”哈特福德市20分钟车程,离耶鲁大学所在地纽黑文35分钟。开车至纽约市区、波士顿市区各需要两小时。每周末有校巴来回两大城市。多数学生选择坐车至纽黑文火车站,搭乘城际火车Metro North进入纽约;或至哈特福德车站,搭乘巴士前往波士顿。Middletown核心街区离校园步行10分钟,有各式风味的餐馆(中餐、日料、牦牛菜、泰国/越南/印度风味等),大超市和一间大型3D影院。

[backcolor=Indigo]关于校园文化特征:[/backcolor]
卫斯理安大学被最新的普林斯顿评论(Princeton Review)评为“最有影响力大学”,反映的是Wes独特的校园文化。Wes学生群体的最大特点就是“影响力”和“多样性”。[backcolor=Yellow]有色少数族裔学生占学生总数45%以上[/backcolor],在私立大学中比例是最高的。国际学生占10%,来自东亚&东南亚文化区的学生有数百人,汉文化和汉语在校内被广泛接受。学生背景的多样性跨越了种族、宗教、国籍、地理区域、家庭经济、性别、性取向等,促成了融合度高、凝聚力强、极度包容开放的学生群体。几乎每个领域最在行、最活跃的人都能在Wes被找到。绝大多数学生个性鲜明、热情饱满,致力于发挥自己的个人影响力。总体来说,Wes的学生热衷于社会参与、政治讨论和艺术创作与表演,但通常情况下,每个人都能找到属于自己的位置。

在一些人眼里,Wesleyan University几乎是一个无缺点的存在。他们总能被这儿的人感染,总能在校园里做最真实的自己,总能找到最适合的资源和最有挑战性的机会实现个人提升和超越。相信你读到这里,已经有了足够的理由按下申请键。总有一天,Wes也能因你而精彩!
 
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ESSAY好棒!!!!

Policy advice看着好像Draft Resolution 2333333 有几点的分析其实可以再深入阐述

Anyway, big cong!!!!!
 
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知道主人公是谁了,一年多前有幸和她辩过一场,然后我放弃了辩论,她在public forum的路上越走越远了。
很为她的admit开心。